I went back to https://badbootjebotoxbopresentsbsa3yall.blogspot.com/2020/02/research-iii-chapter-i-part-iii-short.html this blog post, which I did at the beginning of the project, where I highlighted what I wanted to achieve and broke down the story pretty deftly. So what did I lose sight of in my treatment? 1) The way it reads in this blog with her discovering the paintings is much better, it says that they were self-painted and I think I should change it for the second draft to be more like this, keep it more ambiguous as to the nature of these paintings and suggest that maybe it's just her sister's artistic nature showing. Make Olive's reaction more of a knowing eyebrow raise. 2) The sister should be more opposed to her watching the tapes, making things more mysterious as to why not and as an audience, we'd feel more inclined to keep watching in order to find out what's on them. Maybe have her go through a couple of tapes, she starts investigating a bit ...
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